بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم

To Go Or Not To Go

I don’t know wether this place is good or no
It means for me charity and beautiful memories
But after I had changed , is it still suitable for me?i
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Guys and girls are gathered there
For humanity , of course , are there
But problems chased every place of mixing male & female
So is it still suitable for me ?
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Once I considered it as my home , my dear home
The place where I have found people that understand me
They are like me , thinking , feelings ..they are like me
I have found what didn’t find in my real home or
In my social enviorment , I found myself with them
But after I have changed , should I find new (me) among them
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Questions about that place, where once I wondrered:
“What kind of suffering should we go through to get the Paradise
Oh I feel life here is close to Paradise “
Is this place still like the moment I left it
Are people and relationships are like that in the past
If this place is good and right, why I am hesitated to return back
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My Allah
You know that I have prayed and prayed for you
To show me the truth
I have asked You about this place
Wether if it is bad , so let me be far from it
If it is good , let me come back to it
And messages I received from that place , after my prayers
That invited me to go back
And when I am indeed
Preparing myself for this return, for this Eid
Thoughts and thoughts struck to that mind to, to that weak
Are you serious ? or stupid you are ! oh that is ‘Akeed’
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Hesitation has squeezed me , killed me….
What should I write about it , the devil itself I see challenging me in it
A bottle , I feel , in it , I live

Please, my Art-En Friends
Tell me : should I stay or should I leave

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First of all, I would like to congratulate you for your style of writing, asa well as for the topic you wrote about. I really had very much pleasure reading It.
However, I have a few notes about some sentences: Not misses a "?" Of Course Feeling Wasn't there Why am I , turn back Or return If it is bad , Far from
If it is invited
You should stay and fight and never hesitate, for in fighting, you find your true self.

I apologize if I was a little bit nigative , but I really really liked it and I'm really looking forward to reading more of your writings.
please accept my humble opinion.

 
Wissamo

Thanx for your reply , actually your opion spport my humble trail in writing

and because you are a poet this this means i'm lucky for this notes

In reality, i wrote this topic yesterday , and it is a real plea 4 an answer

I'll change some words according to your notes

Thank you again , and i think i'll keep fighting , keep walking...

 
Portia,

I'ts a very nice poem because it is simple and has a big deal of feeling in the same time, for your question, I will tell you that you have to fight and fight and fight and never lose the hope

thanx

 
الملاك:
nice words, i hope that, now u r my only group in my life 2 i belong

ثائر

i'm afraid of that desciption that i many time was described with ( fighting windmill )o

Thanx 4 ur replies

 
Peace Be Upon You :

Safwat :

I hope I am so
Thanx

Thanx for ur notes


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Portia,
I believe that I'm kind of so late, but I've just notice one thing that I have to notify you about.
I have to mention first you glad I am to see such poem of this kind of thought. My brothers and sisters already put nice comments. So, comment will be only about the following: Please reconsider this phrase and I hope you'll found out my point by yourself.

Keep going, I'm looking forward to see more poems of this orientation.

 
Peace Be Upon You

فارس :

Thank you 4 ur reply


" My Allah "

You may mean if i use

"Allah"

without ' My ' it would be better

But i meant a stong pray , that is from the depth of Man's heart

Thanx again