In Fact I reread the poem and I did NOT find any refernce to such thing. You wrote that You prayed and because of your paryers you ask whether You were forgiven by God, We pray to Allah in order to fogive us and not to people. One of Allah's 99 names is "The Most Forgiving", so can you make the idea clearer please?
I know that you had no idea about these "small things", this is art, this is literature; it's not necessary for you to mean this; but rather what is important is that you wrote about these "small things" unconsciously, and this gives your poem the characteristic of "credibility". When we analyse a poem or a novella or a play, does our analysis mean that the writer means all the analyses we say? Ben Jonson says that one of the art's aims is to delight.



In fact, the word "small" connotes a negative meaning here; I think that you wanted to say "these minor things", didn't you?

Well, I'm happy to see that you want more criticism on your "Not complete poem". Tautology means repetition. In your first stanza, you repeated may things. Repetition is usually used fo the sake of musicality, and musicality isn't your concern in this poem, because you are speaking about demon, prayers, God, etc.

Here you repeated "My" two times. Here the words "disabled am I" are also repeated two times.


Here the repetition is not verbal, but rather it is in the style. The first sentence is negative, the second is affirmative; the third sentence is also negative, and the fourth again is affirmative; So, try to chang the style in the second two sentences. Moreover, you tried to make the second and the fourth sentences rhyming together, when you want to do so you should achieve the balance between these sentences; I mean that the first line is negative as I said, and you used an affirmative sentence in the second line but you used an adverb; you repeated the same style of the first line in the third line, but you did NOT repeat the style of the second line in the fourth. You should add an adverb to the fourth line, so that the second and the fourth lines will have the same number of syllables. You can write "It has been" as "It's been (adv)".

This is my opinion and I respect yours whatever it is.
Of course I meant that.

God Bless You, Sister !

It's I, Ala'.

 
Well, I read it,
I am not that much fond of poetry, um, it does not attract neither, but as structure it is good, but personally it does not touch my inside which is the most important thing in literature.

Keep the good work....

 
Bashar-Sh-Ali,
Inshallah, after the exams

 
I'm sorry everyone, but I have no appetite to write any thing for the time being.