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الكاتب: | Portia [ الجمعة شباط 19, 2010 3:46 م ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم To Go Or Not To Go I don’t know wether this place is good or no
It means for me charity and beautiful memories But after I had changed , is it still suitable for me?i ***** Guys and girls are gathered there For humanity , of course , are there But problems chased every place of mixing male & female So is it still suitable for me ? ***** Once I considered it as my home , my dear home The place where I have found people that understand me They are like me , thinking , feelings ..they are like me I have found what didn’t find in my real home or In my social enviorment , I found myself with them But after I have changed , should I find new (me) among them ****** Questions about that place, where once I wondrered: “What kind of suffering should we go through to get the Paradise Oh I feel life here is close to Paradise “ Is this place still like the moment I left it Are people and relationships are like that in the past If this place is good and right, why I am hesitated to return back ****** My Allah You know that I have prayed and prayed for you To show me the truth I have asked You about this place Wether if it is bad , so let me be far from it If it is good , let me come back to it And messages I received from that place , after my prayers That invited me to go back And when I am indeed Preparing myself for this return, for this Eid Thoughts and thoughts struck to that mind to, to that weak Are you serious ? or stupid you are ! oh that is ‘Akeed’ ****** Hesitation has squeezed me , killed me…. What should I write about it , the devil itself I see challenging me in it A bottle , I feel , in it , I live Please, my Art-En Friends Tell me : should I stay or should I leave ***** |
الكاتب: | Wissam [ السبت شباط 20, 2010 12:44 ص ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
First of all, I would like to congratulate you for your style of writing, asa well as for the topic you wrote about. I really had very much pleasure reading It. However, I have a few notes about some sentences: Portia كتب: I don’t know wether this place is good or no Not Portia كتب: But after I had changed , is it still suitable for me misses a "?" Portia كتب: For humanity , ofcoure , are there Of Course Portia كتب: They are like me , thinking , feelings ..they are like me Feeling Portia كتب: I have found what didn’t found in my real home or Wasn't there Portia كتب: If this place is good and right, why I am hesitated to return back Why am I , turn back Or return Portia كتب: Wether if it is bad , so let me be far of it If it is bad , Far from Portia كتب: Wether it is good , let me go back to it If it is Portia كتب: That invite me to go back invited Portia كتب: Please, my Art-En Friends Tell me : should I go or should I leave You should stay and fight and never hesitate, for in fighting, you find your true self. I apologize if I was a little bit nigative , but I really really liked it and I'm really looking forward to reading more of your writings. please accept my humble opinion. |
الكاتب: | Portia [ السبت شباط 20, 2010 10:19 ص ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
السلام عليكم : Wissamo Thanx for your reply , actually your opion spport my humble trail in writing and because you are a poet this this means i'm lucky for this notes In reality, i wrote this topic yesterday , and it is a real plea 4 an answer I'll change some words according to your notes Thank you again , and i think i'll keep fighting , keep walking... |
الكاتب: | الملاك [ السبت شباط 20, 2010 9:57 م ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Portia, What a quistion and what a pray Portia! we all found diffeculties in adapting to such a socity right here but none of us gave up keep fighting, keep walking, and trust in us and in Alla first and trust yourself butifull hand writting and sensetive feelings 'but has nothimg to do with verse or poetry' it's prose with a fine rithm |
الكاتب: | ثـــائـــر [ الأحد شباط 21, 2010 2:26 ص ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Portia, I'ts a very nice poem because it is simple and has a big deal of feeling in the same time, for your question, I will tell you that you have to fight and fight and fight and never lose the hope thanx |
الكاتب: | Portia [ الاثنين شباط 22, 2010 2:09 م ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
السلام عليكم : الملاك: اقتباس: and trust in us and in Alla first and trust yourself nice words, i hope that, now u r my only group in my life 2 i belong ثائر i'm afraid of that desciption that i many time was described with ( fighting windmill )o Thanx 4 ur replies |
الكاتب: | Safwat [ الثلاثاء حزيران 01, 2010 7:12 ص ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Portia, very good my sis ....make your heart stronger because u ar a very good and honest believer ...I hope that many girls will be like you in their rerspect and fear of Allah .... good luck Itis very nice ... now ladies and gentlemen ...take care of the spelling mistakes ... اقتباس: I don’t know اقتباس: Are you serious ? or stupid you are ! oh that is ‘Akeed’ wether this place is good or no u can replace (akeed) with in deed ...cuz this is poetry and not a lyric ... الملاك, I know u hate both me and my correcting ur spelling mistakes , but I cannot .... اقتباس: to such a
اقتباس: butifull اقتباس: nothimg to do with verse or poetry' it's prose with a fine rithm socity right here |
الكاتب: | Portia [ الثلاثاء حزيران 01, 2010 7:42 ص ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Peace Be Upon You : Safwat : اقتباس: make your heart stronger because u ar a very good and honest believer I hope I am so اقتباس: Itis very nice Thanx Thanx for ur notes ................................................... |
الكاتب: | فارس [ الثلاثاء حزيران 01, 2010 3:20 م ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Portia, I believe that I'm kind of so late, but I've just notice one thing that I have to notify you about. I have to mention first you glad I am to see such poem of this kind of thought. My brothers and sisters already put nice comments. So, comment will be only about the following: اقتباس: My Allah Please reconsider this phrase and I hope you'll found out my point by yourself. Keep going, I'm looking forward to see more poems of this orientation. |
الكاتب: | Portia [ الثلاثاء حزيران 01, 2010 5:38 م ] |
عنوان المشاركة: | To Go Or Not To Go |
Peace Be Upon You فارس : Thank you 4 ur reply " My Allah " You may mean if i use "Allah" without ' My ' it would be better But i meant a stong pray , that is from the depth of Man's heart Thanx again |
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