A story

[Saturnine]

 
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"Run." A mother shouted in fear to let her son named Omar to run away from death. Omar the 7 years old child, runs away to the jungle. From there, he heard, machine gun, canons and jets' ear-splitting sounds. After less than 22 hours. He came back, trying to find his mother, his family, and his home. He was surprised by murderers dressed uniform, and before he realized what was the matter, a machine gun's bullets exploded his head into pieces, less than a moment later, he saw his mother smiling from the other side, calling, "Omar come here my sweet child."

Finish

[Raghad]

 
Saturnine,  
     
Oh my God      What a sad story !!  
May Allah bless them all and protect our nation from such evils

[Lina]

Saturnine,
it's a real story unfortunately
     
may Allah protect all our brothers and sisters in the Arab countries
         

آخر تعديل بواسطة Lina في الجمعة شباط 29, 2008 5:29 م، عدل 1 مرة

[Raghad]

 

A mother shouted in fear to let her son named Omar to run away from death

A mother shouthed in fearto let her son ,named Omar, run away
After"let" put the infinitive without 'to'
 

From there, he heard,

There is no need to this comma after 'heard'

After less than 22 hours. He came back,

After less than 22 hours , he came back  
 

[Obada Arwany]

 
Saturnine,  
What a sad story!!
Thank you lord for the boon of security.
Thank u Saturnine,

[رغدة]

it is a sad and painful story
thanks alot

[سنا]

What a sad story!!
thanks daer.

[Saturnine]

 
Safwat
read this story, I wrote it, if it touches you, so I'm a good beginner

[Nawal8q]

 
Saturnine,  
Nice language and story...but toooooooooooo short!

[Nawal8q]

 
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