Sorry for Being Me

(plz if there is any mistake tell me)
I'm obsessed with my study
I can't act like such a buddy

I use glasses to see better
Maybe that's what pushing her

I don't run after girls asking love
I think you want me to do such stuff

My hair style is so ancient
I don't like to look frightened

Actually I don't know how to speak to a girl
I feel nervous and forget how words' spell

I talk aloud and laugh a lot
Tears of a clown heard you not

You see me angry you are scared
Didn't you think maybe you misheard

I miss you, you misjudge me
You don't know and that's killing me

Your being with other guys makes me mad
And shatters all that i thought we had

I say OK things will change
But you keep your heart in a cage

You like 'us looks exchange'
But you don't want things more to wage

Call me selfish, call me strict
I'm not stupid, I'm not wicked

If all that keeps you away from me
Then all i say is 'sorry for being ME'

آخر تعديل بواسطة Abo MAnAR في الخميس كانون الأول 08, 2011 5:34 ص، عدل 1 مرة

Abo MAnAR,
First of all, I want to welcome you here between us -I may call us "the writers of art-en"--

I was reading for you , and wanted to tell you that never give up and keep trying until you achieve your goals.

Always remember that "practice leads to perfection"
I wanted to say something about your poem,
-The first thing, which is something they always tell me to do but I don't, is when you write something don't write about personal experience in a very CLEAR way, I think you know what I mean.
-The second thing is the line:

Actually I don't know how to speak to a girl
I feel nervous and forget how words' spell

The meaning of this line is understood for us, but if you give your poem to a native speaker he would say: "Do you have a keyboard in your head that tells you how to spell the words you want to say??" or, "Do you usually speak the words letter by letter??"
And what I mean here is that you don't have to know the spelling of the word before you say it, saying a word is much easier than writing it down.
Try to choose a better word.

Wish you the best, good luck.
Keep up the good work.

THANK you Nawal8q,
for your piece of advice

and that is not a really personal experience it's just a collection of things that i see or hear about now and then

also, i think it is our personal life that gives us the best pieces of literature and especially poetry

concerning
Actually I don't know how to speak to a girl
I feel nervous and forget how words' spell

i meant that i couldn't say the words i wanted to and my brain shut down
so i couldn't even know how they are spelled to try to read them
you know how when you are nervous and sweating and your face starts blushing
you start searching your head for the exact words but in vain

Abo MAnAR,

also, i think it is our personal life that gives us the best pieces of literature and especially poetry

I told you, I don't respond to this advice at all, 90% of my writings are personal to the core, but that what they always tell me and so I thought it might help you.

meant that i couldn't say the words i wanted to and my brain shut down
so i couldn't even know how they are spelled to try to read them
you know how when you are nervous and sweating and your face starts blushing
you start searching your head for the exact words but in vain

I also said that for us the meaning is obvious, but for someone who is native, it's not!! it's literally ARABIC!!

Talking to girls is something hard
I lose the words and miss the good start

dear Nawal8q,

what do you think of that

why r u sorry for being u -u must not be sorry for being u-u must feels happy and more happy-we all r people and we need to take care of ourselvs otherwise we will not successeded-and u must loves this life in any ways u loves-thank u for the very nice topics-i love him so much

and by the way r u really nwar abdol hadi

First your poem is very nice and I like it so much
Second you must be happy of what you are not sorry and be sure the one who can't see your kindness is so blind
my dear friend I believe that you are a great person *Hi

محمدالمغربل,
yes, flesh and blood i am him
you know alkosor