عبير,
اقتباس:
Well, here are my first four lines
Emptiness
Like a hero with no power
Like a scentless flower
Like a bird that cannot fly
Like a night with no moon in the sky
This is the First time I know that you have the roots of a poet
I can add a line to yours; "Like Art-en without topics"
اقتباس:
I'll do my best to participate whenever the muse comes
Can you specify which Muse you mean please ??
Because as you know, there are nine "muses" - daughters of Zeus -
1- Calliope : Epic Poetry
2- Clio: History
3- Erato: Love Poetry
4- Euterpe: lyric poetry
5- Melpomene: tragedy
6- Polyhymnia: songs of praise to the "gods"
7- Terpsichore: dancing
8- Thalia: comedy
9- Urania: astronomy
I think you need none of them
Nawal8q,
اقتباس:
Sweet Lies
It did came not fro thy heart.
For thee art known with deceive.
That word to my soul reacheth not.
Afraid are my ears to believe
Nawal, I think you should replace "thee" in the second line with "thou".
The fourth line does not make sense to me!! So what do you mean? I couldn't understand it. I think you can rewrite it in other form so that it can be easier to understanding!!
اقتباس:
My Last Wish
For once in a lifetime,
Show me that you care.
That your arms are opened,
And you're really there.
Give me some of your interest,
Some of everything to share.
This consists of more than four lines
but nice
The other four-line poems are well-composed. I loved the following very much:
اقتباس:
No Longer a Child
Madness had dissolved
The child inside got old
What left of that story died
Outside. Inside, a shining gold
Ezra Pound can't write like it
You reminded me of this poet; because Ezra wrote such short poems, and even shorter; such as "In a Station of the Metro":
The Apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.
This is a two-line poem
In my view, the best one of these poems is:
اقتباس:
Dead inside
Delighted love is all you seek
And pure love is all I offer.
Though strong with you, inside I'm meek
I die each night of pain and suffer.
Those who say you're not a real poet are lying. God Bless You !! You said you're "weak" in the third line and then immediately explained how in the next line. So the poem is coherent, and this is the most important issue here.
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My Muse is vey special it is called Abeer's muse 
