Abo MAnAR,
First of all, I want to welcome you here between us -I may call us "the writers of art-en"--
I was reading for you , and wanted to tell you that never give up and keep trying until you achieve your goals.
Always remember that "practice leads to perfection"
I wanted to say something about your poem,
-The first thing, which is something they always tell me to do but I don't, is when you write something don't write about personal experience in a very CLEAR way, I think you know what I mean.
-The second thing is the line:
اقتباس:
Actually I don't know how to speak to a girl
I feel nervous and forget how words' spell
The meaning of this line is understood for us, but if you give your poem to a native speaker he would say: "Do you have a keyboard in your head that tells you how to spell the words you want to say??" or, "Do you usually speak the words letter by letter??"
And what I mean here is that you don't have to know the spelling of the word before you say it, saying a word is much easier than writing it down.
Try to choose a better word.
Wish you the best, good luck.
Keep up the good work.